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The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six differerent countries over a twenty-year period.

The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six differerent countries over a twenty-year period.
#amount #waste #production #millions #tonnes #six #differerent #countries #period
The table
consist
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consists
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 of information about the mass of trash in 6 countries and during 20 years. In total, the
USA
 has the most share of producing
garbages
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garbage
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 meanwhile, Ireland has the least part. Other lands
also
has
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some
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a
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 fair
amount
 of garbage in comparison to the
USA
 in spite of the fact that no country has not close to it.
To begin
, Japan is in the second rank after the
USA
while
 it has a rising trend like the
USA
 and its waste production doubled during 20 years.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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 the
amount
 of
trashes
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trash
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 in the
USA
 only increases
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by abount
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abount
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about
 50 percent.
Also
,
This
 rise is obvious in Portugal, Japan and
poland
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Poland
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 too in spite of the fact that the
amount
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number
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 of their
wastes
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waste
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are
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is
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 not
consiredable
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considerable
considerably
 versus the
USA
.
On the other hand
, Korea in 1980 did not produce any
wastes
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waste
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then
 it
becomes
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became
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 31 million
tones
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tonnes
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 in 1990 and once again dropped to 6.6 after 10 years.
Further more
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Furthermore
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, Irland stopped making
trashes
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trash
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 in 1990 but it
increases
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increased
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 in 2000 to 5 million tons.
Significanly
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Significantly
, Portugal
has
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had
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 half
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the trashes
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trashes
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trash
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than
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as
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 Poland in 1980 but
in
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on
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 the sharper
slope
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slope,
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this
 volume comes closer to the
amounts
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amount
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 of
garbages
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garbage
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 in Poland. In short, only Korea can cease the rising trend of making
wastes
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waste
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 and other countries have rising rates except Ireland
that
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which
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 had fluctuations in its
amount
.
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