The bar chart shows how many people came from 5 countries to Australia for business, holidays or to visit family and friends in 2017.
The bar chart illustrates visitors
came
to Australia from five countries for different purposes in the year 2017. Correct pronoun usage
who came
Its
Correct pronoun usage
It
showing
Replace the word
shows
number
of Correct article usage
the number
hours
as well holiday
leisure activities.
Correct word choice
as holiday
Overall
, it is clearly seen that reading book
and spending time at the beach is Fix the agreement mistake
books
most
Correct word choice
the highest
numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
hours
spent by tourists. While
,
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apply
people
less
likely to visit the places.
Looking at the Add a missing verb
are less
statistic
, clearly Fix the agreement mistake
statistics
shown
that Wrong verb form
show
people
from China prefer to read books to
8 Change preposition
for
hours
, whereas
American
spend 5 Replace the word
Americans
hours
. There is similarity
showing on the chart that Correct article usage
a similarity
people
of Turkish and Brazilian same hours
spent on reading books. On the other hand
, 3 hours
spent by Chinese people
at beach
and Brazilian tourists are the higher number of Add an article
the beach
hours
spent.
Moreover
, it is easily noticed that the smallest number of travelers
from five countries cameChange the spelling
travellers
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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