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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart represents the
relations
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 between the amount of time
spend
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 on housework and the change in pawnshop of electrical appliances from 1920 to 2019.
First,
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speaking in general,
two
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the two
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datas
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data
dates
has
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 the opposite tendency,
in other words
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, as one spent less on house chores, the more electrical
appliance
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appliances
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 one owned.
Second,
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as we narrow down to focus on the differences between the three electrical appliances on the upper chart. It indicates several
information
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.
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,
in
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 1920 to 1960,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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has
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have
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 drastically
raised
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 and become more popular,
whereas
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 the other two
seems
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seem
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 to have more stable growth.
Also
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, in the
later
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 40 years, the usage of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 have caught up with the refrigerator. The two
chart
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charts
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 expressed a negative correlation between each other. We could say that
human
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humans
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rely
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 on electrical appliances could substantially increase the efficiency of doing daily chores.

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