More and more people are using mobile phones and the internet to communicate. Therefore, people are losing their ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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contemporary world, mobile phones have become
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part of
lifestyle
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. People are using it for communication purposes. Some people believe that
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these devices, individuals are not
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comfortable
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face to
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face
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conversations.
Although
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, I agree that
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modern technology has changed the way of communication
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they are not the only reason behind less physical interaction. To commence with, technology was developed to make lives easier and it is doing
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. Nowadays, with the help
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telephones and
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the internet
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internet
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, a person can talk to his friend or relative sitting in another country,
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,
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was not possible in
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century. It not only helped to reduce the distance but
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helped to make
relationship
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stronger.
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, I agree that people are more busy on phones, whether in scrolling
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, watching movies or other stuff like that, but the culprit behind
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not
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phone
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the phone
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, it's the individual who is using it. He should reduce the time he usually
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on these gadgets
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so that he can enjoy more with his family. Moving
further
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, another cause of less interaction is
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life. There is
big
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race going on in
outside
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the outside
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world and everyone wants to win it.
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, no one has leisure time for his
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ones.
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, students are working hard to achieve good grades so that
the
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can get better
job
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and earn more.
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The same
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is in the case of elder folks. They are running behind making more money and getting successful and because of all
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, they are leaving behind their relationships.
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, yes,
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some
extent
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mobile phones are the cause of less
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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communication but it
also
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depends on the person
how
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and how
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he
use
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it. He should reduce its usage and try to interact with others physically.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proliferation
  • facilitated
  • convenient communication
  • geographical barriers
  • eroded
  • social skills
  • digital divide
  • increasingly isolated
  • digital communication platforms
  • complement
  • mitigate
  • perceived decline
  • in-person communication
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