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is learning english more important than local languanges? give your opinion.

#english #languanges
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There is a
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noticeable
 variance regarding the focus on
language
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 studying. The acquisition of
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english
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language
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 skills
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 more pivotal than that of local
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. In
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equily
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equally
 significant,
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 has
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occupied the top spot of most spoken
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, without
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 extent of ability to speak
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, it is in fact relatively difficult to reach
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 level of achievement in my opinion. Meanwhile, lacking
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 skills can
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 in
reduction
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a reduction
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of
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 opportunity, because
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 every
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aspect
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 society, being able to communicate in
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 is a huge bonus point, sometimes even being an unskippable requirement.
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, if individuals do not have adequate skills of
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, they will face challenges,
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 as rejections from universities and companies they have always aspired to get into.
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, it is
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 crucial to learn local
languages
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, as they contain the culture and history meaning behind it. Simultaneously,
language
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 is
also
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 one of
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the
 building blocks of its
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characteristic
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. If individuals tend to
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solely
 focus on studying
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english
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 for a better opportunity to connect to other parts of the world, the discrepancy between every unique culture and
language
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 itself
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 possible to
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diminish
 ultimately.
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, some measures should be executed. To provide an example, local
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 courses are mandatory here in Taiwanese educational settings.
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, from the beginning of one's school life, you have to study
Madarin
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Mandarin
 thoroughly, even the literature works and cultural value it contains. In conclusion. I
acknowlege
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acknowledge
 how crucial it is to have the ability to
commuciate
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communicate
 in
English
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 in
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 globalizing era, preserving and recognizing the value that local
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 possess are
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 essential.
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Balanced Argument
You effectively addressed both sides of the argument, demonstrating a balanced perspective.
Essay Structure
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Task Response
You successfully identified and discussed the importance of both English and local languages, which directly responds to the task's requirements.
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