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Computer and AI technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence ehance the learning experience? Is this a positive or negative development ?

#computer #technology #education #intelligence #ehance #development
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 the Internet is an interesting discussion point.
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. The main benefit computers bring to learners is access to vast resources. In
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other words, learners were once limited to the books they had and the knowledge of their teacher: now they can study about anything they choose at the touch of a button. Taking Google is a prime example because it allows people to easily search for whatever they are looking for quickly and accurately. In the digital age, many people take advantage of using
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 to connect far
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 to study online without face to face, but
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 beneficial for
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 and pupils, which can expand more understanding.
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, in Covid 19, people
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 to go out, so K12 online is an app for
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 and students
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 the process of school. In
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 writer’s opinion, the Internet is a very positive development.
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 is on the grounds that most students will take advantage of the power of the information available to enhance their studies rather than using it to cheat.
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, in 2000, Cambridge University found that students who regularly used a computer for research were 76 per cent more likely to get a
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 degree than those who did not. Taking all points into account, the possibility of plagiarism is outweighed by easy access to
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 and being able to use these resources positively.
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Introduction
Make sure to directly address the question in the introduction to clearly set the context of your essay.
Content
To strengthen the argument, include a section discussing potential downsides or challenges associated with the use of computers and AI in education, and how these can be mitigated. This will provide a more balanced view and address the essay prompt more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use transitional phrases and sentences to connect ideas and paragraphs more smoothly for better flow.
Grammar and Accuracy
Double-check for minor grammatical errors and sentence structure to polish the essay further.
Examples
You provided relevant examples, such as Google and K12 online, which help substantiate your points effectively.
Structure
The overall structure of the essay, with separate paragraphs for each main idea, helps in maintaining a logical flow.
Conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your stance, reinforcing your argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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