The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of reported challenges that people face when they immigrate to other countries by 3 different age groups.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that people of age over 55 have the highest proportion of encountering the local languages.
In contrast
, those between
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of 18-34, face challenges of accommodation and making friends. Looking at statistics, Adults between
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of 18 and 34
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less difficulty in learning the native language of
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country, which is 29%.
Whereas
, they have a higher percentage of other issues which is 40% looking for a place to live and 46% having trouble making friends.
On the other hand
, those who are aged between
35-and
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35 and
54, face problems finding somewhere to live is 39%
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which highest challenge among
this
age group. Another issue is difficulty in speaking the Native language and making friends 35% and 39% respectively.
In contrast
, the table clearly mentions that 54% of immigrants have trouble learning the language of that country.
While
accommodation and relationship challenges are almost the same, 22% and 23%.
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