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The table below shows the amount of waste production in 6 different countries in 3 different years over a thirty years.

The table below shows the amount of waste production in 6 different countries in 3 different years over a thirty years.
#amount #waste #production #countries #years #thirty
The chart shows the production of
waste
 in six nations over the period of 30 years.
Overall
, the amount of
waste
 produced in most countries showed an upward
trend
.
US
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The US
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 was one of the major
waste
producer
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producers
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 amongst the six nations. In 1980,
US
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the US
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 produced 131 metric
tonn
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tons
 of
waste
, which increased by 61
mteric
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metric tons
tonn
 in 2000. Japan
also
 showed
similar
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a similar
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 upward
trend
 as it produced 28 metric
tonn
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tons
 in 1980 , which rose to 53 metric
tonn
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tons
 by 2000. Both
the
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apply
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countries together produced close to 80 % of the total
waste
. Portugal, Poland & Ireland
also
 showed an increasing
trend
 but the amount of
waste
 produced was not
signifcant
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significant
 as compared to US & Japan. In 1980, all
the
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three nations together produced
a
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waste
 of 6.6
metirc
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metric
tonn
 and by 2000 the number increased by approximately 2.5 times.
However
, the only country that showed
downward
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a downward
show examples
trend
 was Korea. In 1990, it produced 31 metric
tonn
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tons
, which reduced to 19 metric
tonn
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tons
 in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, trend, tonn with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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