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Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time management. Do you agree or disagree?

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In our childhood, we learn not only
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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academic wide
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also
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necessary
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the necessary
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skills
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 required for our daily
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life
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. It is crucial to obtain both hard and soft
skills
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. It is agreed that students should have ownership
on
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of
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time
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management
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, and it will be
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 by bringing up the topic of the importance of independence and how intangible
skills
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 could have
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an affect
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affect
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effect
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 on
one
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’s
life
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, allowing children to schedule their everyday
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life
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 is
one
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 of the keys to independence.
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, In high school, I
have
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 all the
rights
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right
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 to decide my own schedule, so I
stared
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started
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 to reflect on myself with my future
life
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 plan. I try to arrange different events and
contents
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content
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 in my free
time
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. Through the process, I learned
time
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management
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as well as
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 discipline. It is extremely crucial that
one
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 have control over themselves, it encourages them to think, react,
make
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 decisions like an adult.
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, giving children sufficient space allows them to build their own independence.
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, soft
skills
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 are often overlooked by
one
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due to
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 their invisible characteristics, in
this
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 case, it’s
time
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management
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, these abilities are as important as any hard
skills
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 when it comes to living in reality.
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, when
one
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 enters a relationship. It requires
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management
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skills
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 when both of you have different events
in
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 the same
days
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day
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. To rearrange your
time
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 flexibly to match the others is
one
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 inevitable process. So, soft
skills
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 are extremely vital when in reality we are living in a society
that
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where
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 we need to interact with others.
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, It is agreed that students should be allowed to manage their
time
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. By emphasizing the importance of
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 and clarifying that soft
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is
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one
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 necessary requirement
to
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 living in real
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. It is suggested to gradually shift the
responsibly
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 of
time
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 control to children since their growing stage, practice makes perfect!

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • time management
  • self-discipline
  • personal responsibility
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • peak productivity periods
  • real-world demands
  • effective time management
  • controlled environment
  • learning preferences
  • academic performance
  • potential drawbacks
  • misuse
  • procrastinate
  • frameworks and support
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