Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time management. Do you agree or disagree?
In our childhood, we learn not only
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
academic wide
but Rephrase
academically
also
necessary
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the necessary
skills
required for our daily life
. It is crucial to obtain both hard and soft Fix the agreement mistake
lives
skills
. It is agreed that students should have ownership on
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of
time
management
, and it will be analyze
by bringing up the topic of the importance of independence and how intangible Wrong verb form
analysed
skills
could have Correct article usage
an affect
affect
on Correct your spelling
effect
one
’s life
.
Firstly
, allowing children to schedule their everyday life
is Fix the agreement mistake
lives
one
of the keys to independence. For example
, In high school, I have
all the Wrong verb form
had
rights
to decide my own schedule, so I Fix the agreement mistake
right
stared
to reflect on myself with my future Correct your spelling
started
life
plan. I try to arrange different events and contents
in my free Fix the agreement mistake
content
time
. Through the process, I learned time
management
as well as
discipline. It is extremely crucial that one
have control over themselves, it encourages them to think, react, make
decisions like an adult. Correct word choice
and make
Thus
, giving children sufficient space allows them to build their own independence.
Secondly
, soft skills
are often overlooked by one
due to
their invisible characteristics, in this
case, it’s time
management
. However
, these abilities are as important as any hard skills
when it comes to living in reality. For instance
, when one
enters a relationship. It requires time
management
skills
when both of you have different events in
the same Change preposition
on
days
. To rearrange your Fix the agreement mistake
day
time
flexibly to match the others is one
inevitable process. So, soft skills
are extremely vital when in reality we are living in a society that
we need to interact with others.
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To sum up
, It is agreed that students should be allowed to manage their time
. By emphasizing the importance of self dependency
and clarifying that soft Add a hyphen
self-dependency
skills
is
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are
one
necessary requirement to
living in real Change preposition
for
life
. It is suggested to gradually shift the responsibly
of Replace the word
responsibility
time
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