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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

You are studying for a qualification and you would like some time off work to complete it. Ask for some time off to complete a qualification Suggest what you will do latter at work if you have time off Say how the qualification helps your job or company

Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why
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 am addressing you is that
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 want to ask a few
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 about a qualification.
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, now
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 am studying for a qualification and
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 would like some
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 off
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 to complete it. Well,
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 have been studying for
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 for my increasing knowledge and
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 want to
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receive
 some
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 to finish it. I believe that
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 do not do both
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work
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 and a
qualifiaction
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qualification
 so
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 ask to you a bit
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 to
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 it. I can suggest to you, if
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 have
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 off,
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 will
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 very much and
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 can
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good
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.
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 that,
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 will try increasing knowledge of children in our school
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 is the most better to
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. I can teach
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quality education to students.
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, the qualification helps to my job so
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 disturbing situation and will give a helping hand to solve issues. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully, Bakhriddinova Sitora

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Task Achievement
Consider clarifying your points further with more elaboration on how the qualification directly benefits your job and the company. This could strengthen your task achievement score.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on enhancing the clarity and organisation of your essay. Introduce your ideas succinctly, then elaborate on them in a structured manner to improve coherence and cohesion.
Language
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and vocabulary. Using a wider range of vocabulary and grammatical structures accurately can substantially improve your overall score.
Task Achievement
You have successfully addressed all parts of the task, showing a clear relationship between your studies and your work commitments.
Positive Initiative
You've shown a positive initiative by suggesting what you will do after taking time off, which is encouraging.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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