Nowadays, many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problem can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep.
These days, some
humans
complain getting enough sleep because this
people
hard work or Change noun form
people's
many
Correct word choice
because many
people
eating
fast Wrong verb form
eat
food
and energy drink
and Fix the agreement mistake
drinks
this
condition might bring awful sleep.
Furthermore
, many humans
believe and
they have a lot of Correct word choice
that
problem
Change to a plural noun
problems
this
is one of the problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
sleep
and Change preposition
of sleep
also
some people
might be bring
various ill getting enough sleep. Wrong verb form
brought
Besides
that, some young humans
eat fast food
and especially they drink alcohol also
this
meal extremely
unhealthy for many young Add a missing verb
is extremely
humans
and olderly
Correct your spelling
older
people
. Additionally
, junk food
bring
different ill ,bad sleep and unhealthy daily Change the verb form
brings
live
. So, I advise Replace the word
lives
to
they are always eating healthy Correct pronoun usage
them to
food
and fruit juice. For instance
, my sibling have
sleep Change the verb form
has
problem
and Fix the agreement mistake
problems
also
he is do
not sleep every night.
From one perspective, many Change the verb form
does
people
should exercise
and they are eating healthy food
. In my opinion
we should always Add a comma
opinion,
exercise
in the morning every day. For example
, my uncle exercise
each day. Change the verb form
exercises
Furthermore
, he is always with
fit Change preposition
apply
sport
Change preposition
in sport
also
my uncle go
to Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
fitness
club each week. So, he is very healthy and Correct article usage
a fitness
good
sleep. Add a missing verb
has good
Moreover
, my uncle lesson
about Fix the agreement mistake
lessons
sport
to Fix the agreement mistake
sports
many
children. So, he is extremely good sleep every night.
In conclusion, many Correct word choice
apply
humans
complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. Which
issue can lack of sleep cause different ill Correct pronoun usage
This
such
as this
Correct determiner usage
an
ill
heart, Replace the word
illness
lung
and several ills Fix the agreement mistake
lungs
and
Correct word choice
apply
also
some people
told
Verb problem
say that
can
be done about lack of sleep. I think they must eat great Correct determiner usage
this can
food
and exercise
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Structure
Work on organizing your ideas in a clearer, more logical way. Start with an introduction that presents the topic clearly, followed by paragraphs that separately address the problems caused by lack of sleep and solutions to the problem.
Clarity
Improve clarity by working on grammar, vocabulary, and sentence structure. Your message can be made clearer to the reader with simpler, more correct language.
Evidence
Use specific examples to support your points about the causes and effects of sleep deprivation, as well as the measures that can be taken to improve sleep. This makes your argument stronger and more persuasive.
Engagement
You have engaged with the topic and attempted to address both parts of the question: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions.
Use of examples
You have made an effort to provide examples, such as the reference to your uncle's habits, which helps to illustrate your points.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic
Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.
You essay structure should look something like this:
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- One of the first problems of the...
- Another problem that needs to be considered...
- A possible solution to this problem would be...
- One immediate practical solution is to...
