in some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?
In recent times, the trend of getting a personal
fitness
coach is gaining popularity and more people are inclining toward it, rather then
going out to play Replace the word
than
sports
of
do physical Correct your spelling
or
excercises
. Correct your spelling
exercises
exercise
This
is due to
the hectic life style
of a person or his popularity, where he is not able to attend a gym or Correct your spelling
lifestyle
sports
ground and it should be considered as a positive development as it not only allows a person to stay healthy,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
create oppurtunites
and Correct your spelling
opportunities
employement
options for many online Correct your spelling
employment
fitness
trainers.
First of all, Due to
security issues and a busy schedule most of the media and sports
celebrities are unable to attend the
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apply
fitness
centers
or perform Change the spelling
centres
sports
, so they opted
for a personal one Wrong verb form
opt
who
can not only cater Correct pronoun usage
that
their
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for their
health
needs but also
provide personalized meal plans to loose
extra weight and maintain their figure and keep them in shape. Replace the word
lose
Furthermore
, many celebrity kids were way overweight in
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at
start
of their Add an article
the start
carrier
but with the help of a Correct your spelling
careers
fitness
coach
they are now at Add a comma
coach,
peak
of their Correct article usage
the peak
carrier
. Correct your spelling
careers
For
example
Alia Bhut, daughter of famous Add a comma
example,
indian
scriptwriter and movie-maker Change the capitalization
Indian
Mahesh
butt, Change noun form
Mahesh's
looses
Correct your spelling
loses
the
few extra inches with the help of Correct article usage
a
health
expert, who not only trained her muscles and abs but Correct article usage
a health
also
provided her with vegan and keto friendly
options.
Add a hyphen
keto-friendly
Moreover
, Due to
any reason if a fitness
or sport
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sports
center
is closed, the services of a personalized trainer will not be Change the spelling
centre
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halted
halt
and many of them rose to fame Replace the word
halted
due to
online fitness
and training sessions and easy in-home excercises
. Correct your spelling
exercises
For instance
, due to
corona, when every institute was shut down, the lifestyle of an individual become
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became
sedentry
, these trainers Correct your spelling
sedentary
helps
the masses through their online Change the verb form
help
session
and in-house visits,Fix the agreement mistake
sessions
thus
keeping us in our optimum health
.
To conclude
, Health
instructor plays a major role in the lives of those who are busiest of all, like Actors, Doctors and others in the ease of their home
and it Fix the agreement mistake
homes
also
provide
employment options to those who are unable to instruct at gyms and Change the verb form
provides
are
providing these services with the help of internet.Unnecessary verb
apply
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