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The line chart demonstrate the amount of tourists who visited a specific Caribbean island during a period from 2010 to 2017. It is clear that the total number of tourists saw a dramatical rise over the peroid, especially those choosing to stay on cruise ships. According to the chart, there is a noticable increase in tourism in Caribbean islands, with the number rising consistently from 1 million to 2.75 million between 2010 and 2016 before a huge jump to 3.5 in 2017. In detail, the number of visitors staying on island remained steady at 0.75 million in 2010 and 2011, after which there is a significant grow in 2013 with the figure twice as large as that in 2010. Then the number levelled out at 1.5 million despite a drop in 2016. In addition, there was a different trend among the tourists who staied on cruist ships: after a fluctuation between 0.25 million and 0.5 billion for 3 years, it climbed gradually during the rest peroid to 2 million, overtaking the figure for those mentioned above in 2016.

The line chart demonstrate the amount of tourists who visited a specific Caribbean island during a period from 2010 to 2017. It is clear that the total number of tourists saw a dramatical rise over the peroid, especially those choosing to stay on cruise ships. According to the chart, there is a noticable increase in tourism in Caribbean islands, with the number rising consistently from 1 million to 2.75 million between 2010 and 2016 before a huge jump to 3.5 in 2017. In detail, the number of visitors staying on island remained steady at 0.75 million in 2010 and 2011, after which there is a significant grow in 2013 with the figure twice as large as that in 2010. Then the number levelled out at 1.5 million despite a drop in 2016. In addition, there was a different trend among the tourists who staied on cruist ships: after a fluctuation between 0.25 million and 0.5 billion for 3 years, it climbed gradually during the rest peroid to 2 million, overtaking the figure for those mentioned above in 2016.
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 the amount of tourists who visited a specific Caribbean island during a period from 2010 to 2017.
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 the total
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 of tourists saw a
dramatical
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 rise over the
peroid
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period
, especially those choosing to stay on cruise ships.
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 the chart, there is a
noticable
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noticeable
 increase in tourism in Caribbean islands, with the
number
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 rising consistently from 1
million
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 to 2.75
million
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 between 2010 and 2016 before a huge jump to 3.5 in 2017. In detail, the
number
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 of visitors staying on
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 remained steady at 0.75
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 in 2010 and 2011, after which there
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 a significant
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in 2013 with the figure twice as large as that in 2010.
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 levelled out at 1.5
million
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 despite a drop in 2016.
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, there was a different trend among the tourists who
staied
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stayed
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cruist
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cruise
 ships: after a fluctuation between 0.25
million
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 and 0.5 billion for 3 years, it climbed gradually during the rest
peroid
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period
 to 2
million
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, overtaking the figure for those mentioned above in 2016.

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