The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
graph
displays the statistics of (the
number
at
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tourists visiting a particular
carribean
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caribbean
island
between (the
years
) 2010 and 2017) in the
year
2010, there were a quarter of a
million
visitors
that
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stayed on
cruise
ships
,
while
another 750000
visitors
were staying
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stayed
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on
island
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the island
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that
totals
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total
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up to a
million
of
visitors
during that
year
. The following
year
, which is 2011,
half
a
million
visitors
stayed on
cruise
ships
for the
visitors
who were staying on the
island
, the
graph
doesn’t show and decrease or an
increase
because the
number
was the same as the previous
year
, which
is
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was
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750000
visitors
. Total
visitors
for that
year
was 1
million
and a quarter
visitors
. Moving on, the
number
of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
decreased to 250000
visitors
in the
year
2012
while
the
number
of
visitors
staying on
island
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increased to 1250000 people.
This
sums up to an amount of 1500000
visitors
that
year
. In the
year
2013, 500000
visitors
stayed on
cruise
ships
while
1500000
visitors
stayed on
island
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the island
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that
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which
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adds
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added
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up to 2
million
visitors
that
year
. During the next
year
which is 2014, a total
at
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one
million
visitors
stayed on
cruise
ships
while
the same
number
of
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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remained consistent which is 1500000 people, totalling up to two
million
and a
half
visitors
that
year
. For the
year
2015, 1250000
visitors
were staying on
cruise
ships
and 1500000 tourists were staying on
island
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the island
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, showing no changes from the previous
year
. The total of tourists in that
year
increased to 2750000
visitors
. The total
number
of
visitors
remained the same in the following
year
which is 2016
where
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when
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it
summed up
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1500000
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
and 1250000
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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. In the final
year
.
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In 2017
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2017
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In 2017
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, the
number
of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
and staying on
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the island
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island
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the island
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increased
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increase
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increased
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to three and a
half
million
of
visitors
. The
graph
showed an
increase
of
half
a
million
for the
number
of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
which totals up to two
million
visitors
. As for the
number
of
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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, the
graph
also
increased
for
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by
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a quarter
million
which adds up to a total of 1500000
visitors
that
year
. Through the
years
, the
number
of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
showed an unstable
increase
and decrease for the first four
years
,
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but continued to
increase
in the next
year
onwards. As for the
number
of
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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, there was no progress of
increase
or decrease in the first two
years
which are 2010 and 2011 but the
graph
rose until it remained constant for three consecutive
years
in a row. The
number
of
visitors
then
slacked off in the
year
2016
,
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but managed to
increase
to the same level as the
year
before the previous in 2017. All in all, the
graph
showed an outstanding performance for the total
number
of
visitors
throughout
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from
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2011 to 2017, where it increased gradually every single
year
except from 2015 to 2016
where
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when
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it remained constant.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, number, island, years, year, million, visitors, cruise, ships, half, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 11 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 11 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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