All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the question of replacement
cars
, that use traditional fuels, with electromobile
become a field for Fix the agreement mistake
electromobiles
debates
. For me, personally, the answer is quite simple, I strongly disagree with the idea of banning original Fix the agreement mistake
debate
cars
in terms of their convenience and not evolving impact on global
environment.
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the global
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world Add an article
The modern
already
prepared for existing Add a missing verb
is already
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
cars
, it is easy to buy it
and provide all Correct pronoun usage
them
needed
details for Correct article usage
the needed
automobile
. Mostly everywhere it is possible to find a gas station or even handle a bottle of it in a Add an article
the automobile
an automobile
car
, so if you will run out of fuel
it won’t be a problem to resolve this
situation. The first reason to mention is affordability. You can buy fossil
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a fossil
fuel
car
for any budget. If somebody not having
much money Wrong verb form
have
on
their bank account, they can buy a Change preposition
in
car
with simple characteristics or even get it cheaper from a used car
salesman. But for ones
, who desire the most fancy and expensive Correct pronoun usage
those
car
, the global market offers a lot of opportunities. Every customer is free to choose the one that suits their expectation the best. Another advantage of regular
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the regular
a regular
car
is that everyone uses it and already know
how it works. There is no need Correct subject-verb agreement
knows
trying
to figure out how to fix something or go to another state or even a country to find somebody, who can help you Change the verb form
to try
to
repair Verb problem
apply
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the detail
detail
, that Fix the agreement mistake
details
was
broken. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
For instance
, refueling
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refuelling
common
automobile takes about 5 minutes, in Correct article usage
a common
compare
electric Replace the word
comparison
car
need at least 3 hours to charge at the station and more than 8 hours with Fix the agreement mistake
cars
power
generator.
There is a common misconception that electromobiles are more sustainable, but in fact Add an article
a power
for
producing and providing one of them requires way more resources, than a Change preposition
apply
car
that use
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uses
a
fossil Remove the article
apply
fuel
. Actually, the biggest amount of transport that exist
nowadays is using petrol, which made Change the verb form
exists
global
transition to electro Add an article
the global
car
very harmful Fix the agreement mistake
cars
for
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to
environment
, cause all the machines Add an article
the environment
has
to Correct subject-verb agreement
have
be vanished
. Change to the active voice
vanish
have vanished
Furthermore
, the impact of fossil fuel
isn’t Fix the agreement mistake
fuels
that
dangerous as people used to think. Correct word choice
as
For example
, the majority of racing cars
work on “E” fuel
which contain
sustainable ethanol that provides a massive energy output, Change the verb form
contains
while
having up to 90% less green gases.
In conclusion, I can’t agree with statement
about Add an article
the statement
advantages
of electric alternatives over Correct article usage
the advantages
the
ordinary Correct article usage
apply
cars
due to
their inconvenience and questionable topic concluded to their eco-friendly features.Submitted by sofakruglova2002 on
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Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite