The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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line chart illustrates the
number
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of closing and opening
shops
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in a country every year from 2011 to 2018. The closures counts are drawn by the straight line and
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openings
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the openings
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counts are drawn by the stripped line. There were some fluctuations
of
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in
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new
shops
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and retired
shops
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in those 8 years. But
overall
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, we can see that there were
less
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fewer
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closed and opened
stores
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at the end
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of the graph, both slightly and greatly decreased. Closure of
shops
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began at the
number
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of around 6500
shops
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in 2011. It was fluctuating until 2014. One year later, the
number
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of shop
closure
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closures
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dramatically dropped to under 1000
stores
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.
Then
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, it increased again to a few higher than 5000.
On the other hand
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, shop
openings
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were highest in the first data, which reached around 8500
openings
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. It
was
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declined in 2012 to slightly below the
number
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of 4000
stores
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opened. Advancement was happening two years later to 6000 shop
openings
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.
However
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,
then
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gradually descended over the years and went to a
number
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of 3000 new
stores
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in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, openings, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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