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You are planning to go and study English at a school overseas. You would like some information about their courses. Write a letter to the school. In your letter Ask about the school Say what kind of accommodation you want Mention any special request you have (for example diet).

#study #english #school #information #courses #accommodation #request #diet
Dear Sir/Madam, I am interested
to enroll
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 in your University to learn
English
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the English
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 language and I would like to know more details about the
coarses
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courses
 that you have in your establishment. I am planning to start
this
 coming school year and it will be my first time travelling in another country. Since
this
 is my first time in your country, I have
few
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 requests. First is the accommodation, I would like to have an
asian
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Asian
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 roommate,
preferrably
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preferably
 from
korea
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Korea
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,
it
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as it
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 will help me to adjust easily
in
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to
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 the new environment,
also
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and also
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, it will lessen the feeling of being homesick. Apart from that, both of us can communicate well since we speak the same language. Second is the food that you are offering in your cafeteria, I am a vegetarian and I would like to have
varieties
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a variety
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 of vegetable meals on a daily basis if possible. I hope to
hearing
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 from you soon and I am hoping that my requests will be granted. Yours faithfully, Mike
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Accuracy
Be mindful of small grammatical errors and spelling, including the correct spelling of 'courses' instead of 'coarses'.
Task Response
Use specific details to support your requests, like mentioning the type of English courses you are interested in.
Structure
Consider organizing your letter with clearer paragraphing for each request to improve readability and cohesiveness.
Closing
To enhance your letter, you could close with a more specific statement about looking forward to their response or asking for a brochure or website link for more information.
Tone
Your letter is polite and follows a clear structure, making your requests easy to understand.
Organization
Using paragraphs to separate your introduction, accommodation preference, and dietary needs helps readability.
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