The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The following tables depict Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
and bananas
sales
in 1999 and 2004 in 5 countries. Those countries include
UK
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the UK
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, Switzerland, Denmark,
Belgium
and Sweden.
Overall
, we can observe an upward trend in
sales
of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
in all 5 countries.
However
, in the earnings from banana
sales
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sales,
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we can see
upward
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an upward
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trend only
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in Switzerlans
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Switzerlans
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Switzerland
, the
UK
and
Belgium
. The amount of money that
UK
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the UK
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recieved
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received
from
sales
of
coffee
was 1.5
million
euros
, in 1999. And
this
number
has
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substantially increased to 20
million
euros
, in 2004. In
Switzerland
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Switzerland,
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the amount of money has doubled from 3 to 6
million
euros
. The increase
of
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in
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earned money from Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
was less
that
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than
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million
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a million
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euros
in Denmark,
Belgium
and Sweden. Switzerland earned 15
million
euros
, in 1999 from the
sales
of Fairtrade-labablled bananas. And
this
number has increased to 47
million
euros
. In the
UK
and
Belgium
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Belgium,
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we can see
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a substantional
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substantional
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substantial
increase, too. Unlike
to
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apply
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Sweden and Denmark where we can observe
downward
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a downward
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trend.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sales, uk, belgium, million, euros with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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