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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The following tables depict Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and bananas
sales
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 in 1999 and 2004 in 5 countries. Those countries include
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UK
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the UK
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, Switzerland, Denmark,
Belgium
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 and Sweden.
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, we can observe an upward trend in
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 in all 5 countries.
However
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, in the earnings from banana
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sales
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sales,
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 we can see
upward
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an upward
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 trend only
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in Switzerlans
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Switzerlans
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Switzerland
, the
UK
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 and
Belgium
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. The amount of money that
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UK
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the UK
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recieved
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received
 from
sales
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 of
coffee
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 was 1.5
million
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euros
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, in 1999. And
this
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 number
has
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substantially increased to 20
million
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euros
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, in 2004. In
Switzerland
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Switzerland,
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 the amount of money has doubled from 3 to 6
million
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euros
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. The increase
of
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in
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 earned money from Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 was less
that
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than
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million
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a million
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euros
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 in Denmark,
Belgium
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 and Sweden. Switzerland earned 15
million
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euros
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, in 1999 from the
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labablled bananas. And
this
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 number has increased to 47
million
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euros
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. In the
UK
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 and
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Belgium
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Belgium,
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 we can see
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a substantional
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substantional
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substantial
 increase, too. Unlike
to
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apply
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Sweden and Denmark where we can observe
downward
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a downward
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 trend.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sales, uk, belgium, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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