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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data illustrate information about the percentage of female school-leavers going into higher education in many countries between 1980 and 2015
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 and
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 and South
Korea
 and France experienced an upward trend,
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 Australia showed
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 same percentage during the period. In South
Korea
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 the percentage almost doubled. In 1980, in the UK school-leavers
rate
 was approximately 34%. In the USA it
rate
 was approximately 39%. In
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Australia
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Australia,
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 it
rate
 was approximately 59%. In
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South
Korea
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Korea,
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 it
rate
 was approximately 15%. In
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France
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France,
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 it
rate
 was 50%. In 2015, in the UK school-leavers
rate
 rose significantly reaching
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around 55%. In the USA it
rate
 grew considerably reaching
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around 59%. In
Australia
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Australia,
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 it had
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 same
rate
 in 1980. In South
Korea
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Korea,
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 it increased dramatically to around 30%. In France rose slightly reaching
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almost 55%.
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