The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart offers a glimpse into the causes of worldwide
land
degradation
by category, with the accompanying table presents
the same issue by region, namely North America, Europe and Oceania.
Multiple factors Wrong verb form
presenting
contributes
to Change the verb form
contribute
the
Correct article usage
apply
land
degradation
worldwide, among which over-grazing plays the most crucial role, resposible
for 35% of the Correct your spelling
responsible
overall
land
degradation
. The negative impact brought by deforestation and over-cultivation cannot be neglected as well, constituting 30% and 28% of the degradation
respectively. The remainder is shared by different factors, occupying 7% in total. Howver
, the Correct your spelling
However
overall
trend may mask considerable variations when dissected by region. A closer look at the table reveals that over-grazing remains the main factor of degradation
only in Oceania, with a share of 11.3% of the 13% of total land
degarded
. Correct your spelling
degraded
regarded
While
Europe holds the largest land
degraded at 23%, the main reason stands in
deforestation at 9.8%, as over-cultivation and over-grazing Change preposition
for
also
pose considerable
threat to Add an article
a considerable
land
degradation
at 7.7 and 5.5 respectively. Only 5% of land
is degraded in North America, with over-cultivation contributes
a notable 3.3%, Wrong verb form
contributing
while
deforestation holds the lowest share.
Overall
, the cause of land
degradation
can be multifaceted, each countries
should positively Change to a singular noun
country
adapting
measures to local conditions.Change the verb form
adapt
be adapting
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