The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart offers a glimpse into the causes of worldwide
land
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degradation
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by category, with the accompanying table
presents
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the same issue by region, namely North America, Europe and Oceania. Multiple factors
contributes
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to
the
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land
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degradation
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worldwide, among which over-grazing plays the most crucial role,
resposible
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responsible
for 35% of the
overall
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land
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degradation
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. The negative impact brought by deforestation and over-cultivation cannot be neglected as well, constituting 30% and 28% of the
degradation
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respectively. The remainder is shared by different factors, occupying 7% in total.
Howver
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However
, the
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trend may mask considerable variations when dissected by region. A closer look at the table reveals that over-grazing remains the main factor of
degradation
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only in Oceania, with a share of 11.3% of the 13% of total
land
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degarded
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degraded
regarded
.
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Europe holds the largest
land
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degraded at 23%, the main reason stands
in
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deforestation at 9.8%, as over-cultivation and over-grazing
also
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pose
considerable
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threat to
land
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degradation
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at 7.7 and 5.5 respectively. Only 5% of
land
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is degraded in North America, with over-cultivation
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a notable 3.3%,
while
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deforestation holds the lowest share.
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, the cause of
land
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degradation
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can be multifaceted, each
countries
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country
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should positively
adapting
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measures to local conditions.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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