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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the charge in percentage of the population age 65 and obove in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the charge in percentage of the population age 65 and obove in three countries.
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The table illustrates the percentages of people who are over 65 years old in
three
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 nations in 1988, 2000, and 2030.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all
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 places are
aging
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, and senior citizens are increasing.
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 a big problem they have to face in the future. The proportion of Germany was the highest in these
three
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 different years, and the UK has the lowest percentages in the table during the times.
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,
Canada
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 is always in the second position. Looking at the table more closely, one can see that
Canada
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 and Germany increased 5% each time. Great Britain
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, in the first 12-year period, the figure was nearly no change.
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, Britain gained 5%. In 1988,
Canada
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's and the UK's numbers were closer, and the gap was around 2% but in 2000, the gap became bigger, and it accounted
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%. The difference between
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 and Germany was kept
in
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at
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 5% at
three
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 different times.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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