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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
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 line graph depicts the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the United
of
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Kingdom between 1981 and 2000. In general, Petroleum is the most product
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 by citizens in the United
of
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Kingdom around 140
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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 between 1984 and 1986 and
decrease
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 in 1990
around
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 100
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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, petroleum popular again between 1995 and 2000. And two products
are
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coal and natural gas
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 around 80 and 40
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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 in 1981, respectively. In 1986
product
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 of coal dramatically drop approximately 40
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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 and equal
natural
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 gas. Coal
has
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level
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a level
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 increase in 1985 and stable from 1986 to 1999 and
decrease
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decreased
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 again from 60 to 30
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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, The natural gas stable at around 40
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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 from 1981 to 1990 and slightly decline from 1991 to 2000. it has
peak
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a peak
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 of point around 100
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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