Some people think that news media nowadays have infulenced people's lives in negative ways to what extent do you agree or disaggree.
The majority of
people
believe that News
and media
these days have a bad effect on people
. I totally disagree with this
and I will discuss that.
On the one hand, these days people
are addicted to the media
news
. Because they are provided for all over the world news
, gossip immediately. People
very easy to know everything for a few minutes. Therefore
, they are addicted to it. For instance
, in the Isreal, and Palestine wars all the people
know about how many people
are dying and enjoy because of media
news
. moreover
, media
is a very effective way for people
to live life.
Not only, but
Correct determiner usage
that, but
also
the media
news
effect for other reasons such
as advertisements like news
new products introduced for media
. Therefore
people
get it very soon. for example
, the introduction new iPhone 15 to all over the world for one-time form media
news
. It is very useful for society. Therefore
media
news
is very effective for people
.
On the other hand
, sometimes the media
is given to ring news
. Is that they are not taking responsibility for their occupation. As a result
, people
get it wrong meaning they all media
news
. For instance
, someone who gives some news
that is
like a ring Isreal killed for Palatine people
and did not give humanitarian aid such
as food, and water, as a result
, people
get it bad effect for feac
Correct your spelling
each
fear
news
. And they do not believe the media
news
.
In conclusion, These days media
news
is a very effective way for people
because they are given good news
very soon. therefore
, people
can get it very soon and they have knowledge about all
over the world.Correct pronoun usage
it all
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