Some say that news have no connection with most people’s life and it is waste of time for most of us to read newspaper and watch television new programs Do you agree or disagree

It is thought that there is no relevance of
news
to citizen’s life and is
also
believed to waste our time
to update
Change the verb form
updating
show examples
new
information
though
Correct your spelling
through
show examples
reading traditional
as well as
watching digital video
news
. From my perspective, I strongly disagree with these beliefs and will explain the reasons in
this
essay. First of all,
news
plays a vital role in the process of sharing
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
information
about various fields.
People
receive data that
relating
Wrong verb form
relates
show examples
directly to them
such
as events, cost of
foods
Fix the agreement mistake
food
show examples
, disasters,…
therefore
,
people
can have effective
solution
Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
show examples
for potential problems and make
right
Add an article
the right
show examples
decision
Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
show examples
.
For example
, in Vietnam, particularly
the
Change preposition
during the
show examples
period of
breaking
Verb problem
apply
show examples
Covid-19, the Vietnamese
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
successfully
avoid
Wrong verb form
avoided
show examples
this
, is mainly thanks to the guidance of
government
Correct article usage
the government
show examples
via online
news
such
as isolations,
human
Correct word choice
and human
show examples
safety activities.
This
is one of the most outstanding merits of
news
, which makes me believe it has a close relation to
human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
show examples
.
Furthermore
, newspapers and television
new
Correct your spelling
news
show examples
channels always reveal the sphere of
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
society.
News
can be considered as a colossal knowledge that helps
people
to expand their horizons.
This
can be illustrated by the example of
businessman
Fix the agreement mistake
businessmen
show examples
,
entrepreneurs
Correct word choice
and entrepreneurs
show examples
,… in
Vietnam
Add a comma
Vietnam,
show examples
as they utilize
news
as one of
effective
Add an article
the effective
show examples
ways to survey, and have
deeper
Add an article
a deeper
show examples
understanding of potential locations and commerce through
information
Add an article
the information
show examples
of
Change preposition
on
show examples
competitive rivals,
standards
Correct word choice
and standards
show examples
living
Change preposition
of living
show examples
,… In conclusion, I believe that
news
has a strong connection with
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
show examples
, and benefits them
by
Change preposition
with
show examples
large
Change the article
a large
show examples
amount of handy
information
. Two of the most attractive
function
Fix the agreement mistake
functions
show examples
, which strengthen the connection with
people
are: providing essential data and enhancing knowledge.
Submitted by vantueman496 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Task Achievement
Ensure to maintain a balance in developing both sides of the argument when prompted by a 'do you agree or disagree' task to fully address the task requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to include a wider variety of linking words and phrases to enhance the flow and cohesion of your essay.
General
Proofread your essay to correct minor grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for better clarity.
Introduction & Conclusion
You have effectively introduced and concluded your essay, presenting a clear stance throughout.
Use of Examples
You provided relevant examples to support your main points, enhancing the clarity and persuasiveness of your argument.
Logical Structure
The essay demonstrates a clear logical structure, making it easy to follow your argument and understand your viewpoint.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: