Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

It is widely argued that most
people
think
experimentation
on
animals
is necessary, but other
people
feel that
experimentation
on
animals
is unjustified and illegal. I believe that
people
need continued
experimentation
on
animals
, and there are alternatives to replace
experimentation
on
animals
. First of all, despite
scientists
do
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no ethical concerns,
experimentation
on
animals
can be justified.
Scientists
and doctors
made treatment
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treated
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diseases in
people
, and they could do justified
experimentation
on
animals
.
Moreover
, experts use rats to cure diseases and innovate vaccines
on
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through
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experimentation
.
For instance
, in 2020 amount of
people
infected the COVID-19, and millions died of the epidemic in
people
. If experts made
experimentation
on humans
is
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very dangerous,
people
might die in
experimentation
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the experimentation
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process.
Hence
, experts argue that
experimentation
on
animals
used
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is used
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to treat disease in
people
.
On the other hand
, alternatives to the
corpses
of the deceased are available, if families are willing to dedicate the bodies of someone who has recently died.
Furthermore
, the
corpses
of the deceased are even more relevant.
For instance
,
scientists
researched
these
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the
corpses
of the deceased.
Scientists
discovered the
corpses
of the deceased had got diseases and hurt before
people
had
alived
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lived
.
Consequently
, most
people
no longer believe that it is necessary to
experimentation
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experiment
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for
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with
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any
animals
.
However
, it is believed that
motst
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most
people
think the bodies of the deceased are hoy in Taiwan, using them for
researching
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research
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procedures is complex and difficult. It is not easy to
obtained
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obtain
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the
corpses
of the
beceased
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deceased
be ceased
. In conclusion,
people
keep on
experimentation
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experimenting
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with new things, in order to change
people
’s and animal’s lives. But we must ensure to any humans and any
animals
, and they are doing to injury.
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Introduction Clarity
Consider clarifying your stance on animal experimentation more clearly at the beginning. Mention whether you mainly support or oppose it, then follow up with your reasons.
Supporting Examples
Try to use examples more effectively to support your points. While you mentioned COVID-19 and research on deceased bodies, these examples could be connected more explicitly to your main arguments.
Cohesion
Ensure a smoother flow between paragraphs by using linking words or phrases that clearly show the relationship between ideas.
Grammar and Word Choice
Be cautious of grammatical accuracy and word choice to avoid confusion. Phrases like 'do no ethical concerns' and 'motst people think the bodies of the deceased are hoy in Taiwan' could be revised for clearer meaning.
Balance of Argument
Think about exploring both sides of the argument more completely. Discussing the ethical considerations and the significance of finding alternatives to animal testing will strengthen your argument.
Structure
You introduced the topic and provided a conclusion, establishing a clear structure for your essay.
Content Depth
You tackled both sides of the argument and attempted to provide alternatives to animal testing, which is commendable.
Topic Engagement
The essay opens up an important conversation on ethical considerations, showcasing your ability to engage with complex topics.

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