The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007

The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007
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the two pictures illustrate how much the coastal
town
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, of Petland, had changed from 1950 to 2007.
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, the
town
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underwent a number of dramatic changes, the most important of which are the construction of many houses,
shops
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, and buildings around the
town
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catering
for
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the people's life in Petland. In the west-north, the industrial in 1950 had converted into a large land serving people's activities including a park was built at the top, under it was a new
multi-story
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multi-storey
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car park and the
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center
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of the west-north was a swimming pool,
while
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the bottom of the land had been erected a chain of
shops
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. The other section in the west-south only had a small adjustment when a cinema and shop were constructed.
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, the most of roads in the
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center
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of the
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still remained until 2007 with a new road added along the
Yatch
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Yacht
marina in the north ( which was a sea in the past). On the opposite side, the
north-east
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, three new apartments were built,
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the bottom and
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center
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centre
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of the land had removed
car
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the car
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park and turned into many
shops
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. In the section below in the east-south, a large grassland had been divided into two equal sectors with new houses and a few
shops
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which were lined by a new road in the
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center
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centre
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, shops, center with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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