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Many people work from home using modern technology today. Some people think that only the workers benefit from this and not the employer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, using
technology
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 become ubiquitous all around the world.
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, a large number of people who work at home
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 modern
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in
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apply
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these days. It is deemed by some individuals that using
technology
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only
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 beneficial for the
employees
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 and not the employer.
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,
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technology
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 might be more practical for
workers
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, I strongly disagree that there are no merits for
employers
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. There are some reasons why
technology
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 has some profits for
workers
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.
Firstly
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, Those modern
technologies
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 provide many job opportunities for
workers
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such
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 as bloggers and freelancers which
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allows many people to earn money at home.
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, there are myriad
technologies
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 that enable
employees
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 to save more time because these
type
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types
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 of
technologies
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 are time managing.
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, translators can easily use different applications to translate different types of content.
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, these reasons can be overlooked when we compare them with the benefits of modern
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 for
employers
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. On the
ither
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other
 hand, there are ample benefits for bosses for using modern
technologies
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. As we can see using AIs
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 fashionable these days which can be useful for managers.
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, they can give some information to them and take some
advices
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 and useful
advices
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 from them about how to manage their
employees
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 wisely.
Likewise
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, websites are more popular these days and
employers
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 can easily find some business partners
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on
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the internet
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internet
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 in order to sign a
beneficia
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beneficial
 contract for their companies.
To sum up
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,
while
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 modern
technologies
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 have some benefits for
workers
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,
there
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they
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 are more effective for
employers
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. As
employees
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 can save their time and find other jobs with
technlogies
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technologies
,
employers
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 can sign a contract and get some
feedbacks
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feedback
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 from
technologies
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.

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Introduction
Your introduction clearly outlines the topic and your stance, effectively setting the stage for your argument.
Argument balance
You provided a balanced view by discussing benefits for both workers and employers, demonstrating a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
Conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and restates your position, reinforcing your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • employee productivity
  • cost savings
  • talent pool
  • geographical limitations
  • monitoring productivity
  • company culture
  • employee satisfaction
  • turnover rates
  • communication challenges
  • collaboration
  • efficiency
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
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