The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of sales of electronic games in
billion
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dollars from 2000 to 2003.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that CDs
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the highest preference game among people
in
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throughout the period,
while
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games and software were the lowest choice by mass from 2000 to 2003. Looking at statistics, in 2000 CDs comprised
at
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around 35
billion
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and in 2003 it remained more than 30
billion
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.
On the other hand
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, DVD/video was almost 10
billion
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in 2000 which
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constantly increased till 2003 and reached
at
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30
billion
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.
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, Games and Software accounted
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around 10
billion
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in 2000 and slightly rose
11
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to 11
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billion
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in 2001,
then
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steadily increased to 19
billion
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in 2003.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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