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The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
The bar chart illustrates the number of sales of electronic games in
billion
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 dollars from 2000 to 2003.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that CDs
was
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 the highest preference game among people
in
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throughout the period,
while
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 games and software were the lowest choice by mass from 2000 to 2003. Looking at statistics, in 2000 CDs comprised
at
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around 35
billion
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 and in 2003 it remained more than 30
billion
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.
On the other hand
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, DVD/video was almost 10
billion
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 in 2000 which
was
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constantly increased till 2003 and reached
at
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30
billion
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.
Moreover
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, Games and Software accounted
at
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for
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 around 10
billion
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 in 2000 and slightly rose
11
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to 11
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billion
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 in 2001,
then
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 steadily increased to 19
billion
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 in 2003.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • global sales
  • media types
  • software
  • significant increase
  • decline
  • popularity
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • peak sales
  • growth rates
  • fluctuations
  • digital technology
  • traditional media
  • digital downloads
  • streaming services
  • consumer habits
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