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The spread of a ‘global language’ such as English will threaten national languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Over the
last
 few years, the number of
people
 who learning the
English
language
 has increased significantly. Because the
English
language
 is very common in the
world
.
Although
 there are some
people
 who disagree with spreading the
English
language
 all over the
world
.
However
, some
people
 prefer it more than those who do not. Partly, I agree with
this
 opinion because there are oppositions. In
this
 essay, I will explain both sides and draw my own opinion. On the one hand, these days the demand for foreign
languages
 is increasing around the
world
. Mainly, young
people
, teenagers and department workers learning the
English
language
 for their careers.
For example
, learning the
English
language
 has increased double that of three years ago only in Uzbekistan. A lot of
people
 learn it because
this
 is easier than another
language
language
.
That is
 why, it will threaten the national
language
.
On the other hand
, there are opposite opinions. A group of
people
 mentioned that hated only learning
English
, maybe learning other
languages
language
 like French, Russian and Indian
languages
instead
 of
English
. They are willing other
languages
 in their country. In conclusion, the spread of
English
 can effectively for around the
world
. But there are drawbacks to
this
 opinion. These drawbacks, other
languages
 could not increase and spread as national
languages
.
Therefore
, I believe that
English
's popularity and positive influences outweigh it is negative sides
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task response
Try to include a clearer thesis statement in your introduction, explicitly stating your viewpoint on the issue. This will make your argument more direct and understandable.
task response
Work on developing your examples more thoroughly. Providing more detailed examples from real-life or studies can significantly strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you maintain a clear logical structure throughout your essay. Your essay should smoothly flow from one idea to the next, leading the reader through your argumentation effectively.
coherence cohesion
Focus on varying your sentence structures and linking words to improve the cohesion of your essay. This will help your ideas to connect more smoothly, making your essay easier to read.
introduction
Successfully introduced the topic and outlined the main points to be discussed.
content
Provided a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument, which enriches your essay's content.
conclusion
Concluded your essay by summarizing your main points and stating your opinion, providing a clear closure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lingua franca
  • international communication
  • erode
  • linguistic diversity
  • transmitted
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • diluted
  • dominant
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language policies
  • real-time translation
  • technological advancements
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