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The spread of a ‘global language’ such as English will threaten national languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#spread #language’ #english #languages
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Over the
last
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 few years, the number of
people
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 who learning the
English
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language
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 has increased significantly. Because the
English
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language
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 is very common in the
world
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.
Although
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 there are some
people
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 who disagree with spreading the
English
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language
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 all over the
world
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.
However
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, some
people
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 prefer it more than those who do not. Partly, I agree with
this
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 opinion because there are oppositions. In
this
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 essay, I will explain both sides and draw my own opinion. On the one hand, these days the demand for foreign
languages
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 is increasing around the
world
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. Mainly, young
people
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, teenagers and department workers learning the
English
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language
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 for their careers.
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, learning the
English
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language
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 has increased double that of three years ago only in Uzbekistan. A lot of
people
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 learn it because
this
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 is easier than another
language
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language
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.
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 why, it will threaten the national
language
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.
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, there are opposite opinions. A group of
people
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 mentioned that hated only learning
English
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, maybe learning other
languages
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language
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 like French, Russian and Indian
languages
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instead
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 of
English
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. They are willing other
languages
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 in their country. In conclusion, the spread of
English
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 can effectively for around the
world
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. But there are drawbacks to
this
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 opinion. These drawbacks, other
languages
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 could not increase and spread as national
languages
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Therefore
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, I believe that
English
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's popularity and positive influences outweigh it is negative sides
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task response
Try to include a clearer thesis statement in your introduction, explicitly stating your viewpoint on the issue. This will make your argument more direct and understandable.
task response
Work on developing your examples more thoroughly. Providing more detailed examples from real-life or studies can significantly strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you maintain a clear logical structure throughout your essay. Your essay should smoothly flow from one idea to the next, leading the reader through your argumentation effectively.
coherence cohesion
Focus on varying your sentence structures and linking words to improve the cohesion of your essay. This will help your ideas to connect more smoothly, making your essay easier to read.
introduction
Successfully introduced the topic and outlined the main points to be discussed.
content
Provided a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument, which enriches your essay's content.
conclusion
Concluded your essay by summarizing your main points and stating your opinion, providing a clear closure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lingua franca
  • international communication
  • erode
  • linguistic diversity
  • transmitted
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • diluted
  • dominant
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language policies
  • real-time translation
  • technological advancements
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