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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
amount
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number
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 of
visitors
 to a certain Caribbean island regarding
with
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apply
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two different types of tourists, they are staying on cruise ships and staying on
island
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the island
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seperately
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separately
 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
, the total number of
visitors
 showed a steadily
increaing
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increasing
 trend with a slight fluctuation, beginning at 1 million
of
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apply
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individuals in 2010 to 3.5
millions
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million
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 in 2017. compared with the previous year, the
amount
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number
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 of
visitors
 saw a slight decline from almost 2.75 to 2.7
millions
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million
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 in 2016. Meanwhile, the aforementioned two types of
visitors
 experienced waves. In spite of the lowest population
with
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of
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 0.25
millions
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million
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 in 2010 and 2012, there
were
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was
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an increseaing
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increseaing
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increasing
 people
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who prefered
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prefered
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preferred
 staying on cruise ships in the rest years with 2
millions
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million
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 in 2017.
By contrast
,
despite
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the sum of
visitors
 who opted to
staying
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stay
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 on
island
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the island
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 showed
a
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an
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 increasing
begining
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beginning
 at around 0.7
millions
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million
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 in 2010 to 1.5
millions
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million
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 in 2017. Its raking had been replaced by the previous type
especially
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, especially
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 in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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