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**The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.** **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**

**The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.** **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**
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A glance at the line chart provides the demographic proportion of citizens in
cities
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 in four Asian countries including the Phillippines, Malaysia, Thailand and
Indoneisa
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Indonesia
 from 1990 to 2020, with the forecast for 2030 and 2040.
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, the vast majority of people in the four areas increasingly lived in
cities
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 in the given time,
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while
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 the
percentage
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 of the population in the Phillippines living in
cities
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 fluctuated.
According to
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 the information shown in the graph, 32% of the population in the Phillippines
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living
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lived
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 in
cities
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 in 1970 which was the most in the four areas
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 there were only 13% of the Indonesians lived in
cities
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 in the meantime which was the lowest.
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, the majority of Malaysian lived in
cities
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 after 1990 and the
percentage
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 of urban citizens was expected to reach 85% in 2040 which was almost three times more than its
percentage
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 in 1910 by 30%.What should be particularly mentioned is that the
percentage
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 of the urban population in the
Phillipptnes
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Phillippines
 witnessed a 10% reduction between 1990 and 2010 from 50% to 40% and was predicted to go back to 50% after 4 decades from 2010.
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, the
pereage
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percentage
peerage
 of individuals living in
cities
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 in Thailand grew from 19% to 48% during the given period.
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