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Some people believe that increasing tax on various industries will reduce pollution whereas others believe that there are better alternatives. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that
pollution
 can be effectively reduced by raising taxes on various sectors that contribute significantly to
pollution
.
Such
 an approach is said to have positive environmental outcomes. By making
pollution
 more expensive for businesses, they want to maintain more sustainable and environmentally friendly air.
On the other hand
, there are those who believe that there are better ways to reduce
pollution
 than normal. In my opinion,
this
 approach may be the most effective means of decontamination. An increase in taxes reduces industrial
pollution
. By taking a
multi pronged
Add a hyphen
multi-pronged
show examples
 approach, we can tackle
pollution
 more and more effectively.
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Introduction
Start with a clear introduction that outlines your essay and presents the contrasting viewpoints.
Support
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea supported by examples or further explanation.
Examples
Present specific examples or evidence to strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing.
Conclusion
Conclude your essay by summarizing the key points and clearly stating your opinion with justification.
Linking Words
Use a wider range of linking phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs, enhancing the logical flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
You have successfully discussed both views as the prompt requested, indicating a good understanding of the task.
Structure
The structure of your essay is adequate, with an attempt to introduce the topic, discuss both sides, and include your own opinion.
Relevance
Your essay reflects a good effort to address the topic and include relevant points concerning pollution and taxation.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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