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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter: • suggest how you could help her in her home • say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………….,

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Dear Mrs Barrett, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I want to help you
for
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the
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apply
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cleaning purposes as you advertised in the newspaper that you need someone to clean your house. We are
professional
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a professional
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cleanining
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cleaning
 company ,which is open Monday to Friday from 9 am to 5 pm .
We
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There
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 are five members in a team and each team members have three
year
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years
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 of cleaning service experience . You can visit our online website and check
customers
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customer
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 reviews
also
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. I would like to help you because my close friend name Marry lives in your street and she told me that you are looking for cleaning professionals . Our company is always ready to help customers and their
close
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loved
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one's
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. I will help you out
in
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on
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 weekdays but we are not available on weekends . I already know your house because I cleaned many houses on your streets ,so ,
i
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 think we could finish deep cleaning of your house in one day . Please visit my website "The Professionals" and contact me through email . If you have any
question
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 you can contact me on 7797894062 and our business hours are 9 am to 5 pm. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal Kaur

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vocabulary
Try to use a more varied vocabulary and avoid repetition to enhance your expression.
accuracy
Remember to check for typographic and grammatical accuracy to ensure clarity and professionalism.
personalization
Consider personalizing your letter more by sharing specific skills or experiences relevant to the advertised position.
structure
You have established a logical structure with clear paragraphs delineating different ideas.
tone
You have successfully used politeness and a respectful tone suitable for this type of letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Domestic chores
  • Culinary skills
  • Horticulture
  • Cultural immersion
  • Work ethic
  • Flexible schedule
  • Time management
  • Prior commitments
  • Punctuality
  • Reliability
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