The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
The figures below
water
consumption distribution in Residential, Industry and Agriculture parts in San
Diego
, California
and worldwide.
Overall
, it is clear that
substantially more amount of water
is consumed for Residential purposes in the 2 United States provinces than the world average. In contrast
, Unlike the United States of America, most of the water
is used in Archiculture around the world.
Regarding water
usage for agricultural matters, nearly two-thirds of the water
sources are spent in this
field, while
this
figure stands as only 17% and 28% in San
Diego
and California
respectively.
In terms of Residential and Industry categories, San
Diego
and California
consume 60% of their water
in the former section, while
for
Worldwide Change preposition
apply
this
rate is only 8%. San
Diego
is the same as the world average in terms of water
used Industry( 23 per cent) and California
's rate is 10 per cent higher than that.Submitted by soroush.nezami on
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