The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

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consumption distribution in Residential, Industry and Agriculture parts in

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Diego

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California

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and worldwide.

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it is clear that

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substantially more amount of

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is consumed for Residential purposes in the 2 United States provinces than the world average.

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, Unlike the United States of America, most of the

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is used in Archiculture around the world. Regarding

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usage for agricultural matters, nearly two-thirds of the

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sources are spent in

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field,

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figure stands as only 17% and 28% in

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and

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respectively. In terms of Residential and Industry categories,

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Diego

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and

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consume 60% of their

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in the former section,

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Worldwide

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rate is only 8%.

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Diego

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is the same as the world average in terms of

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used Industry( 23 per cent) and

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's rate is 10 per cent higher than that.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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4 paragraphs

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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

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