The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

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The figures below

water

consumption distribution in Residential, Industry and Agriculture parts in

San

Diego

California

and worldwide.

Overall

it is clear that

substantially more amount of

water

is consumed for Residential purposes in the 2 United States provinces than the world average.

In contrast

, Unlike the United States of America, most of the

water

is used in Archiculture around the world. Regarding

water

usage for agricultural matters, nearly two-thirds of the

water

sources are spent in

this

field,

while

this

figure stands as only 17% and 28% in

San

Diego

and

California

respectively. In terms of Residential and Industry categories,

San

Diego

and

California

consume 60% of their

water

in the former section,

while

for

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Worldwide

this

rate is only 8%.

San

Diego

is the same as the world average in terms of

water

used Industry( 23 per cent) and

California

's rate is 10 per cent higher than that.

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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this develoment outweigh the disadvantages?

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