The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

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consumption distribution in Residential, Industry and Agriculture parts in

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Diego

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California

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and worldwide.

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it is clear that

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substantially more amount of

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is consumed for Residential purposes in the 2 United States provinces than the world average.

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, Unlike the United States of America, most of the

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is used in Archiculture around the world. Regarding

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usage for agricultural matters, nearly two-thirds of the

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sources are spent in

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field,

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figure stands as only 17% and 28% in

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and

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respectively. In terms of Residential and Industry categories,

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and

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consume 60% of their

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in the former section,

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Worldwide

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rate is only 8%.

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is the same as the world average in terms of

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used Industry( 23 per cent) and

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's rate is 10 per cent higher than that.

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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

In many parts of the world, some famous people are considered as 'role models' and they are having an increasing influence on the young. Is this a positive or negative development?

Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. Write to the director of the school and request these documents.

Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays most green energy is becoming evermore prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce cost ad better for the environment. Others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use their money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?