The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK.

The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK.
The bar graph illustrates how much
time
children between 10 to 15 years old spend chatting on the Internet and playing video
games
on
gadgests
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gadgets
on an average school day in the UK.
Overall
, it is evident that
boys
on average spend more
time
on
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playing
games
than
girls
,
whereas
,
girls
devote more
time
for
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chatting than
boys
. Regarding online chatting, nearly two-thirds of
girls
use their tools for chatting
while
this
figure stands at around 55% for
boys
.
furthermore
, the vast majority of both genders spend 1-3 hours
for
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it, about 25% and 35% for
boys
and
girls
respectively.
Aprroximately
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Approximately
a quarter of both
genders
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gender's
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chatting
time
is less than an hour. A mere 5
percent
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of
boys
stand in the 4 hours plus range and for
girls
it
around
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4% higher than that. In terms of playing video
games
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devices, A huge gap
among
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between
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genders in
notabale
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notable
.
While
85% of guys play video
games
daily on
averagem
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average
, just above half of the
girls
do so. For
higher
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proportion of
boys
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boys,
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the
time
spent stands in
1
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the 1
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-3 range whilst it is less than an hour for the other gender.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, games, boys, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescents
  • chatting online
  • games consoles
  • average school day
  • time allocation
  • social interaction
  • gaming habits
  • internet usage
  • preference
  • daily patterns
  • peak times
  • weekdays
  • weekends
  • gender differences
  • trends
  • implications
  • social skills
  • physical health
  • academic performance
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