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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Parenting comes with a huge responsibility . Parenting is not a child's play as parents are the first teacher of a child . children are pliable and it's
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 parents to mould them to become a great human being . One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people who believe that it's a great
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 to teach parenting in school to become a good parent . There is a range of conflicting arguments related to the assertion.
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 is divided into two groups as per distinct mindsets of different folks . In the succeeding monograph, I intend to delve into
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task response
Expand your essay to cover all parts of the task more fully. Describe why some people might believe teaching parenting skills in schools is beneficial and contrast this with opposing views. Finally, provide a clear opinion and support it with examples or evidence.
coherence cohesion
Develop your points more thoroughly. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea followed by supporting detail or explanation.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively. A clear introduction, body paragraphs for each main point, and a conclusion would enhance your essay's structure.
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The introduction briefly sets the scene for a discussion on teaching parenting in schools.
coherence cohesion
You've correctly identified the essay as a discussion with differing viewpoints, which is a good start.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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