The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of
The first diagram
show
that Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
land
start to downgrade cause from
land
degradation by using pie
chart to show the Add an article
a pie
percentage
. Second
diagram will show infoChange the article
The second
that
how much Change preposition
on
land
did
itVerb problem
apply
get
worse and all of Wrong verb form
got
this
info come
from threeChange the verb form
comes
area
of the world.
For damage to Change to a plural noun
areas
land
, excessive feeding amounts to the largest proportion, where as
other causes Correct your spelling
whereas
is
the smallest proportion. Losing the forest and growing too many Change the verb form
are
crops
are both high percentages. But growing too many crops
are highest and Losing the forest are Rank
down to second. Growing too many Verb problem
is
crops
have 35 percentage
but losing forest have less than growing too
many Replace the word
per cent
crops
for 5 percentage
.
The table shows the reasons for damaged soil in three areas of
the world. In all three areasReplace the word
per cent
have
North America, Verb problem
are
Europe
and Oceania
. Europe
has the highest percentage
of damaged land
overall
and North America is
the lowest Verb problem
has
percentage
of detriment. For cutting down tree
and over cultivation Fix the agreement mistake
trees
also
the highest but growing too many crops
Oceania
is the highest.
Change preposition
in Oceania
For
Change preposition
Overall
overall
overgrazing have
very highest score ofCorrect subject-verb agreement
has
damaging
.
Replace the word
damage
Europe
has the lowest score from the overgraze and Oceania
has the highest score. The lowest in
Change preposition
apply
overall
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
plant
too many Wrong verb form
planting
crops
but now Oceania
are the lowest and Europe
are
the highest for Correct subject-verb agreement
is
grow
too many Change the verb form
growing
crops
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, percentage, crops, europe, oceania with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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