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The line graph illustrates the population of three counties, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population of three counties in 60 years

The line graph illustrates the population of three counties, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington state of Oregon which increased over 60 years, between 1940 and 2000. Washington has the highest population of three counties in 60 years
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The line graph illustrates how the residents of 3 counties namely
Columbia
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,
Yamhill
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 and Washington state changed over a 60-year
period
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, measured by thousands.
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, it can be seen that the population of Washington was highest throughout the
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while
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 the figure for both counties
Columbia
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 and Yamihi had the same increasing trend but
Yamhill
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 was still modestly higher
at the end
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 of the
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. In 1940, the inhabitants
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 Washington were approximately 75,000
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 . After that, it witnessed a dramatically went up by over 125,000
people
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 in 1970.
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, in 2000 the number rocketed to reach a peak of 245,000
people
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Columbia
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 and
Yamhill
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 followed a similar pattern, with
Yamhill
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 slightly surpassing in numbers, starting at 27,000 and 30,000 in 1940 respectively, the population in both counties gradually climbed until 1970,
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 rose dramatically to finish the whole
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 with 35,000
people
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 for
Columbia
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 and 45,000
people
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 for
Yamhill
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Vocabulary: Replace the words columbia, yamhill, period, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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