Write about the following topic: Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Compared to natural foods, processed foods usually cause higher

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of fluctuations in cholesterol. And among the long list, processed

sugar

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is

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of the main items that

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show to have negative impacts on health, and

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, is important for

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to cut down on

sugar

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. It is agreed that elevating the

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of

sugar

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-made products can decrease

one

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’s will to consume the same amount of

sugar

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.

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statement will be analyzed by bringing up the

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sensibility of processed foods and how the extra profits should be used to improve

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condition.

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, different types of groceries come with different kinds of

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sensibility. For the

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one

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that are higher, indicating

a

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slightest change in

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can result in

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difference in demand.

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chocolate bar has increased by 2 Taiwanese dollars, and now is more expensive than other similar bars, I would prefer to buy the cheaper

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, because I am not willing to pay 2 more dollars just for the specific item. In

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case, I would consider

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the frequency of buying from two times to once per week.

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, increasing the

price

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can help with limiting the

sugar

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intake from the consumer

behavior

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dimesion

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dimension

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, higher

price

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means higher profits to companies. As for the enterprises that

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benefit

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from

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situation,

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of doing nothing, the extra profits should be allocated properly.

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, making advertisements that

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the right message and concepts to

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. Another example could be holding activities

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raise the awareness of

sugar

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intake. All the actions should be either educational or avocational to influence consumers positively.

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, the excess amount of income should be put

into

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good use and make

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impacts

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to

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the community.

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increase

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the price

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price

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prices

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in

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sugary products can encourage people to less

sugar

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consuming

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. It is considered an effective approach result

from

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the high

price

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sensitivity characteristic and the

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actions that

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the

overall

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acknowledge

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towards

sugar

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.

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, it is suggested that with all the

action

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actions

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taken,

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sugar related

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sugar-related

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issues can be improved.