Some people say that older, more traditional buildings in cities should be preserved. Others believe that these buildings should be demolished and new ones built in their place. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
People
often debate whether an ancient buildings
should be built up or destroyed. Some of them consider that they will be landmarks Correct the article-noun agreement
an ancient building
ancient buildings
whereas
others believe that they are useless.
On the one hand, many people
believe that traditional buildings are beneficial for society in many ways. This
is because they help other people
to recognize the unique building of the town. For example
, tourists throughout the world travel to different places just to experience alternative traditional values and landmarks so this
will be attractive things for them. The ancient building Correct pronoun usage
these
also
helps younger children improve their skills in historical structure
in a better way. Fix the agreement mistake
structures
Thus
, the unique traditional place will be destroyed if the new apartment was
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is
instead
.
However
, there are few people
who think that restoring building
is not necessary and Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
use
high cost. To illustrate, sometimes building up an old building may use more cost and more time than building a new one. Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
Moreover
, due to
the increase of
population, someplace Change preposition
in
is
not able to contain all staff in the building so they need a different that Correct subject-verb agreement
are
answer
their wants. Correct subject-verb agreement
answers
For Instance
, In Maharashtra number of forts and historical telling building
are preserved for Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
the
tourist Correct article usage
apply
attraction
in a way Fix the agreement mistake
attractions
So
Correct word choice
apply
it
helps to boost the country's economy Correct pronoun usage
that
while
foreigner comes to know about that place more and more. In addition
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the
also
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to taking
create
vigilance about culture in Change the verb form
creating
younger
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the younger
generation
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generation's
mind
. It Fix the agreement mistake
minds
is helps
to conserve culture and history ever and forever.
In conclusion, having considered each side of the argument, I am opinion that there are lots of social values and beneficial with the historical Change the verb form
helps
building
to keep Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
it
with our society.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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Introduction & Thesis Clarity
Ensure a clear differentiation between your introductory sentences and your thesis statement. Beginning with a general statement before narrowing down to your specific stance helps clarify your argument for the reader.
Paragraph Structure & Balance
In discussing both views and your opinion, maintain a balanced approach in the body paragraphs. Use topic sentences to introduce each viewpoint clearly, supporting them with examples or reasons, and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for coherence.
Language Variety
Aim to use a wider range of vocabulary and grammatical structures to express your ideas. Variety in language not only demonstrates your language proficiency but also keeps the reader engaged.
Conclusion Strength
Consider concluding your essay by summarizing the arguments presented and reiterating your opinion clearly. This helps to reinforce your stance and provides a satisfying closure to your argument.
Essay Structure
You have a clear structure that navigates through both views and your opinion, making it easy for readers to follow.
Use of Examples
Your use of examples, such as tourists visiting for traditional values and the economic boost from preserving historical sites, effectively supports your points.
Understanding of Topic
You show a good understanding of the topic with relevant arguments that highlight the importance of preserving historical buildings.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?