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The chart below shows percentages of staffs not going to work for different reasons between 2000 and 2010

The chart below shows percentages of staffs not going to work for different reasons between 2000 and 2010
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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of staff not attending work for various reasons between 2000 and 2010. It is evident from the chart that male
unemployment
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rates
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 were highest in
Sweden
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,
while
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 all male proportions in the three countries examined were higher than their female counterparts.
Conversely
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, the lowest
rates
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 of joblessness were observed among females in South
Korea
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. In 2005,
Canada
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, South
Korea
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, and
Sweden
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 experienced male
unemployment
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rates
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 exceeding 60%, approximately 62%, 75%, and 80%, respectively.
Moreover
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, the number of unemployed women in
Sweden
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, which was the highest among the countries in 2005, was close to 40%. Comparatively,
Canada
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 and South
Korea
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 had lower
rates
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, at 35% and 30%, respectively. In 2015, the proportion of unemployed individuals in
Canada
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, South
Korea
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, and
Sweden
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 shifted.
Sweden
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's male
unemployment
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 rate slightly decreased to approximately 70%, which was lower than
Canada
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's and South
Korea
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's
rates
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, close to 75% and 80%, respectively.
However
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, female
unemployment
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rates
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 in
Canada
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 and
Sweden
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 saw significant increases to 55%,
while
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 South
Korea
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's remained steady at 30% of inhabitants
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rates, sweden, korea, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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