The chart below shows percentages of staffs not going to work for different reasons between 2000 and 2010

The bar chart illustrates the percentages of staff not attending work for various reasons between 2000 and 2010. It is evident from the chart that male

unemployment

rates

were highest in

Sweden

while

all male proportions in the three countries examined were higher than their female counterparts.

Conversely

, the lowest

rates

of joblessness were observed among females in South

Korea

. In 2005,

Canada

, South

Korea

, and

Sweden

experienced male

unemployment

rates

exceeding 60%, approximately 62%, 75%, and 80%, respectively.

Moreover

, the number of unemployed women in

Sweden

, which was the highest among the countries in 2005, was close to 40%. Comparatively,

Canada

and South

Korea

had lower

rates

, at 35% and 30%, respectively. In 2015, the proportion of unemployed individuals in

Canada

, South

Korea

, and

Sweden

shifted.

Sweden

's male

unemployment

rate slightly decreased to approximately 70%, which was lower than

Canada

's and South

Korea

rates

, close to 75% and 80%, respectively.

However

, female

unemployment

rates

Canada

and

Sweden

saw significant increases to 55%,

while

South

Korea

's remained steady at 30% of inhabitants

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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rates, sweden, korea, canada with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.

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