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Advertisements influence us in a negative way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying that the trend of the influence of
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This
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impact
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this
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impact
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, some
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 send indirect
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messages
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 that have a negative
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people
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take
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make
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 use of
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to
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 their own
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interests
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,what happened to the
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 company that
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 so many cars
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solved
sold
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damages. In terms of,there is some
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,all
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serves
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 one goal.
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 for food or tools may
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people
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amazing
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restaurants
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garages
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 that can repair your cars will help many
people
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 in their daily life and make it much easier.If I needed some fancy place to take my lovely wife and
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 saw some
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 bar that
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served
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food,
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 would save my
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marriage
. In summary, there is no easy answer to
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etheir
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their
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.we need just to let the
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us and avoid the negative
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Coherence & Cohesion
Focus on clear, logical paragraph structures to enhance coherence. Begin each paragraph with a topic sentence, followed by examples or explanations.
Task Achievement
To strengthen task achievement, ensure that your examples are directly related to the topic and clearly explained. Consider both sides of the argument comprehensively before reaching a conclusion.
Grammar
Pay attention to correct spelling, punctuation, and use of capital letters to enhance the clarity of your message.
Task Achievement
Expand on your ideas by providing more detailed explanations and a wider range of examples. This will help to fully address the task.
Task Understanding
Your essay introduces the topic and attempts to discuss both sides, demonstrating an understanding of the task requirements.
Conclusion
You've provided a conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint, which is a positive aspect of task achievement.
Examples
Use of real-world examples, such as the car company, demonstrates an effort to support your points with specific evidence.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumerism
  • Influence
  • Manipulative
  • Materialistic
  • Idealized imagery
  • Impulse buying
  • Overconsumption
  • Target demographics
  • Advertising campaigns
  • Societal norms
  • Data mining
  • Decision fatigue
  • Psychological impact
  • False needs
  • Brand loyalty
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