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The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The 2 bar graphs illustrate
proportion
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the proportion
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 of secondary
education
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as well as
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 higher
education
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 among people in
The
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apply
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Europe, Sub-Saharan
Africs
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Africa
( SSA), Latin America, and East Asia.
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, it is evident that a substantially higher percentage of adults achieve secondary
education
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 degrees than
the
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higher degrees. Another interesting fact is that women generally outnumber men by a margin in Higher
education
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while
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 the opposite trend is noticeable in Secondary
education
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.
In addition
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, individuals in Europe are relatively the most educated and in The SSA are the least educated. Regarding Secondary
education
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, an incredible 100% and
justbelow
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just below
 90% of females and males respectively complete the degree,
in contrast
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, only a mere
of
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about 20% of females and close to 9
percent
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per cent
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 of people in SSA achieve
this
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 title.
Furthermore
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, Latin America and East Asia rates range
40
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from 40
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-50
percent
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per cent
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 for both genders. In terms of Higher
education
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, almost 50% of European males get
this
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 qualification
while
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this
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 figure stands at just above 40% for their women.
Conversly
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Conversely
, people
of
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from
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 3 other areas are considerably less educated than Europeans, resting at
somwehere
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somewhere
 in
20
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the 20
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% to 30% range.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • disparities
  • secondary education
  • higher education
  • rates
  • regions
  • significant
  • analysis
  • comparisons
  • economic conditions
  • social conditions
  • political conditions
  • highlighting
  • notable gap
  • observed
  • surprising findings
  • affirming
  • overview
  • illustrate
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