the bar chart shows the number of hours worked per week by men and women in Australia.

the bar chart shows the number of hours worked per week by men and women in Australia.
The given bar chart illustrates and compares the distribution of working
hours
among
males
and
females
in Australia, measured in percentages.
Overall
, it is obvious that Australian
men
devote more
hours
per
week
to their careers compared to
women
.
Nonetheless
,
both
genders predominantly spend between 30 and 50
hours
a
week
on employment, which represents the most common range. Equally important, a small proportion of
both
males
and
females
work exceptionally long
hours
, exceeding 80
hours
per
week
. On the lower end of the spectrum, less than a fifth of
women
work 0 to 10
hours
per
week
,
while
the corresponding percentage for
men
is slightly lower.
Similarly
, over 20% of
females
and around 12% of
males
are working in the 10 to 20-hour category.
Conversely
, the disparity becomes more pronounced in the 30- to 50-hour range, where over two-fifths of
men
are employed weekly, nearly 8% more than
women
, who comprise approximately 35%.
This
range represents the peak working
hours
for
both
genders. Moving to the higher brackets,
although
the proportion of
males
working 60 to 80
hours
per
week
exceeds that of
females
, the
overall
percentage declines gradually for
both
groups. Specifically, 30% of
men
and about 18% of
women
fall into
this
category.
Furthermore
, approximately one in ten
males
and
females
in Australia work over 80
hours
per
week
.
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