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More and more plastic waste has polluted cities, countrysides, and oceans. What problems does it cause and what measures can be taken?

#plastic #waste #cities #countrysides #oceans #measures
A number of places
such
 as cities, villages, and seas have been contaminated by
greater
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a greater
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 number of
plastic
waste
.
This
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about
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the
factor
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factors
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 that contribute and
solution
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solutions
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 to solve
this
 problem. There are many reasons why several places
such
 as cities, villages and seas have been polluted by
plastic
. One main factor is
use
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the use
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 of
plastic
 extensively. Today,
plastic
 is
material
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a material
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 that
be
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is
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 used in various places from
the
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apply
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rural to urban
area
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areas
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. Many individuals
also
 utilize plastics in several life aspects
such
 as household, food packaging,
tecnology
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technology
manufactures
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manufacturers
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and
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etc.
Furthermore
,
lack
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the lack
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 of adequate infrastructure in
plastic
waste
management
influence
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in
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increasing
plastic
waste
. Nowadays, both villages and metropolitan cities still do not have
highly-quality
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high-quality
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of
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plastic
management
system
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systems
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.
As a result
,
plastic
contaminated
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is contaminated
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 everywhere which
this situations
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this situation
these situations
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will cause disease growth. The government
together with
 society can tackle
this
 problem with various solutions. The first
solution
 is
increase
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enviromental
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environmental
 education and awareness.
This
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These
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 actions can be done by conducting education programs which have target
on
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society especially children and teenagers about the importance of
waste
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proper waste
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management
 properly and the negative impact of
plastic
waste
to
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 the environment.
For example
, local
council
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councils
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 can introduce
enviromental
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environmental
 socialization programs
to
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 schools. The second
solution
is reduce
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plastic
use
. People can minimise their consumption of
plastic
 by promoting and encouraging
to
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them to
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 utilize the materials that possibly can
be recycle
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be recycled
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such
 as paper, stainless steel and other materials that can
be recycle
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be recycled
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 and naturally
decompossed
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decomposed
. In conclusion, the factors which contribute
in
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 more
plastic
polluted
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 in several areas are
,
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extensive
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the extensive
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use
 of
plastic
 and
lack
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the lack
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 of adequate infrastructure in
plastic
waste
management
.
Whereas the
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solution
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solutions
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 for
this
 problem are increasing
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environmental
enviromental
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environmental
 education and awareness and reducing
plastic
use
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