The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and repeating the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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population
in the percentages from 1970 to 2020 and with prediction
for 2030 and 2040 in four Asian countries.
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Overall
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line graph, the noticeable percentage changes occurred with
Malaysia and Indonesia of the total Change preposition
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population
living in cities with prediction in several decades.The Philippines and Thailand countries also
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proportions
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population
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