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The diagram shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
#floor #plan #library #years
The given maps
demonstrates
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 the changes ac
Occur
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 in a central
library
 on the floor
side
during
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 20 years which made the
library
 look modern now.
Overall
, changes had taken place in every
area
 of the
library
expect
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except
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 the entrance. The entrance to
library
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the library
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 in
south
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the south
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 direction
remain
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 unchanged,
while
 major development
had occur
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 in other areas.
Firstly
, the enquiry desk for tickets, book returns and so on and
reading
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the reading
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 room for newspapers and magazines
had
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 replaced by a cafe and a computer room respectively after 20 years. The tables and chairs used to be in
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center
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 part of the
library
,
however
 nowadays they are no longer there. On one
hand
, adult non-fiction
books
 and
on the other
hand
, adult fiction
books
 were
ther
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there
 in the past on
right
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right-hand
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hand
side
 and
left
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left-hand
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hand
side
 of the tables and chairs .
But
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, the former
are
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a
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was replaced by adult fiction
books
,
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an informatio
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informatio
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information
 desk and three self-service machines. The latter
side
 was swapped by all reference
books
.
Furthe
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Furthermore
, the top North-West direction
area
 for Children's
books
 was replaced by
lecture
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the lecture
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 room. In the same way, the top North - East
side
 now has
expanded
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an expanded
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area
 with
place
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a place
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 for storytelling events and children's fiction
books
, but in past it used to be
area
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an area
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 for
the
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CDs, videos and computer games.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, side, area, hand, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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