In many countries goverment are investing new technology to deal with the public. Why this is happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of goverment money?

It is a common idea that the governments of several nations are investing in new technologies to interact with the people.
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appropriate
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to improve their
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. It must be understood that technology
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a way that help people stay competitive in the global economy.
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modern
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international investment and
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more jobs in the modern market jobs.
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methods in the digital ages like now.
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others
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nations in the world
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, China,
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Japan
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the using of
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goverment
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government
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citizens life
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goverment
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government
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like a solution that not only
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the
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but
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nations stay competitive in the global economy.
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necessary
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. To
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conclude
, investing in new technology to engage with the public is appropriate.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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