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Public libraries will soon now longer be housed in a building as all facilities and books will be available online for all to access. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of public libraries only existing online

#libraries #facilities #books #access
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Many years ago people used to fight to get the literature they wanted to read and having access to the library was considered to be luxurious. Nowadays though people are so spoiled with books that can be downloaded on the phone or laptop that nobody goes to the public
libraries
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 anymore. On one hand, using online books is definitely much more practical and faster, especially when you can scroll through all the
book
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books
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 in a second or ask your device to find a needed passage for you. But the online book will never be able to smell like paper
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. It
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 will never be located in the library which looks like
museum
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a museum
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 and which people from all around the world come to see. 
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,
libraries
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 are very often taking so much space that you need a couple of hours to find a needed copy. It is
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 possible that the book you need is simply already taken by somebody else and you have to wait to borrow it. With online
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storages
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 it, obviously, never happens. There you always have unlimited and countless options for you. From
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 practical point of view it makes a lot of sense, to move all the public
libraries
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 to the online version, but thinking about
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 generation being not able to visit the places where we were studying and getting all the knowledge is sad.  In
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 I would like to say, that the idea of public
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 existing online is not so bad, as long as we keep the most beautiful public
libraries
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 as places of sightseeing and memory.
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