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The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in differentareas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,makecomparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in differentareas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,makecomparisons where relevant.
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The chart
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 one illustrates data on what percentage of
oil
 each area of the world
have
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,
whereas
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share
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the share
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 of
oil
 consumed every year in the same areas.
Overall
, what stands out from the graphs is that
while
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the Middle
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 East have the largest amount of
oil
resource
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resources
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 in the world, the
percantage
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percentage
 of
the
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oil
 consumption
anually
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annually
 in Asia is the highest. Looking into detail,
Middle
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the Middle
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 East have the highest amount of
oil
 and it
rankes
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ranks
ranked
with
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at
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 approximately 57%.
Other
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 area which
have
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considerable
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a considerable
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 amount of
oil
 is Canada with just under 15% and
oil
 resources in other parts of the world
is
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are
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 lower and they all together account for about one-third. Regarding the other chart,it is apparent that
oil
 usage in Asia, the United States and Western Europe is the largest(26.21%,25.48% and a little less than one-fifth respectively). The percentage of
oil
that is
 used yearly in
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the Middle
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 East, Central and South America and Eastern Europe is approximately the same ( 6%).Meanwhile,other areas do not use so much
oil
 and each of them
use
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uses
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 less than 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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